Pandora

Out Of The Blue!!By Raja!

by on Feb.04, 2011, under Literacy

The school bell had rang. It was a frosty afternoon. As I walked home, the snow crackled beneath me. Suddenly, a violent man came and tried to chase me. I ran as fast as I could but he always caught up. At that moment, he shoved me into a colossal crystal clear pond…..

I woke up! I found myself in the middle of a forest. I lifted my hand up and the air was wet. Just as I stood up, the luscious green grass tickled my foot as I walked. I sprinted towards he vast trees. As I made my way through, I found myself at the edge of a mountain!

As I looked at the beautiful sight, something was to be heard. Cautiously, I turned around. My eyes lit up. I slowly walked backwards. Tripping over a vine, I found myself confronted with a savage beast…….

As he was walking towards me, he bellowed out and creature’s came from nowhere. They all glared at me in disgust. A male creature came towards me. He studied me carefully and walked back.
“Human” He said.
They all took several steps back. They took out their weapons that gleamed brightly. All charged towards me.“STOP!!!”
A noise was to be heard in the distance. A colossal dragon came out of the sky. Its skin glimmered in the sun. It landed in front of us all. A man leapt off it. Everybody bowed down in respect. After a while, I had realised that this man was the King of this world. He greeted me, but glared and me disgracefully. “Ah. A human” He said.
Several minutes later, he came over to me and told me something. The Human war was near. Just then, as we were talking, a missile darted towards us at rapid speed!

I ran for my life. I dodged all missiles. Suddenly, I saw a little figure. It was screaming. As I looked at the figure, I saw a missile heading straight towards her! I dived towards it and pushed. It stumbled over a vine and rolled down a hill. As it rolled, a monstrous boulder crossed its body. The sight was truly horrifying. Just then, an explosion came from nowhere. Flames burst up. I went flying and hit my skull on an immense rock. I screamed in pain and struggled to get help. I looked around and saw everyone standing guard. After a while, a spear bolted towards me. I closed my eyes and prayed for help. At that moment, I looked in front of me; a vigorous animal was standing there protecting me. The Humans war had just begun………

After a while, I stood up and staggered towards a spear. I lifted it up. A few minutes later, a pile of human’s came to attack me. I sliced my way through bodies. At that moment, a knife slashed through my chest. My face was filled with fury. I took the knife out of my body. My eyes turned red. I sliced my way through the crowd. When I was done, there was absolute silence. Bodies scattered all over the floor. Blood puddles were everywhere. I stood there in shock. Suddenly, a bullet came at me. I dodged the bullet, but got stabbed with a knife. I lifted my hand up, and clenched my fists. I came towards the man and swung a punch at his stomach. I carried on and started to punch him even more. He glared at me in anger. He stumbled towards and started to fight back. Bruises were found all over my body. Blood was everywhere. I fell to the floor. When I got up, I made a run for it. I made it to a colossal tree. I looked at it carefully as it glowed. Luminous colours sparked out of it. My face dropped. I turned around. As I turned around, a spear pierced through my forehead. Blood was covering my face. Just then, my heart stopped…….

By Raja

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  • Maryam

    WOW! Raja a great story. I love your second paragraph when it said: I woke up! I found myself in the middle of a forest. I lifted my hand up and the air was wet. ‘ I think it is a great way t start describing a setting or a place.

    But could you improve on your connectives, I cant see that many in them. But please try to improve, and add some more in them. But over all FANTASTIC!

  • John

    WOW!!!
    Well Done Raja.
    I liked it how you had a charecter who made you go to Pandora because it makes you feel that you were there on purpose, from that charecter. I love the part where you could not be beaten at the end, because it makes it feel like you are fighting for your life in Pandora e.g ” At that moment, a knife slashed through my chest”.
    I WISH you can make another story like this, because it is Fandabadosy.
    You could make it even Fandabadosy-er, by using more of a range of VCOP.
    But other than that it was BRILLIANT!!!

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