Pandora

Warriors Of Kudlak

by on Feb.04, 2011, under Stuff

As the scortching sun was shining on the building, Combat 3000, I (Saleha) was playing a war game inside it. Children had protective armour on with a Sontaran Blaster with one hundred lives. Sprinting here and there, just waitind for clever people to attack, I was waiting for my points of level one. Showing my magnificent points, the talking computer announced,                                                                   “You are ready for level two now!                                                                                                                      
“Yes! Oh yes! I came first.” I replied, while jumping up and down like a brown kangaroo. With excitement, I dashed into level two of the war game in the colossal Combat 3000. However now, we only had ten lives in the Sontaran Blaster. There was a secret a room, where it led us to the world champion – ship of the war game. As soon as the first person gets inside the secret room, they would have the world champion – ship trophy. When I reached to the secret room, I got trapped between two doors. I panicked. Rapidly, my heart started beating. All of a sudden, there was thrash of lightening, with clouds banging and heavy rain. Brr! What had happened?

Plip! Plop! Plip! Plop! As the bitter water was dripping down of he leaves, I slowly opened my brown eyes. Gazing at the foggy sky, I stood up. Looking around me, I saw that this moon that I was on was a world of wonder and mystery, which was incredibly dangerous, but has strange beauty. Because of the toxic atmosphere, no human being could live on the moon without special protection. For some reason, as I got here (well how ever I got here), I already had special protection. As the sky was turning bright and the crystal, clear water reached at the end of the waterfall, viscous animals were here and there, sprinting everywhere. Just then, the sky turned misty. The leaves were waiting for the transparent, trickling water to drip off. Whilst life – threatening animals were roaming everywhere, colossal , bumpy trees were stood there silently and alone… Thirsty, ragged roots were looking for salty water to drink. On the other hand, I could see from far away, blue naves were gazing at animals to kill. As well as venture in the tropical rainforest, it looked radiant. This was a monumental world with dangerous beauty!

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  • Maryam

    Well Saleha a great begging of a story, and I cannot wait for the next one. I think you have used great vocabulary in your story like: monumental,colossal, transparent. And lots more. Your writting is so good I cant even think of a way you could improve it. Oh- well you can improve on your openers, because I think you have used alot of ‘as’ in the beggining of sentences.

  • Mr Mitchell

    This is such a great start to your story. I’m just checking that this is just the beginning Saleha? If you complete this, make sure you paste this in before you start the next section. Your sentence construction is very clever!

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