My Pandora Story
by pandora on Feb.06, 2011, under Stuff
The frost crept down the street early in the morning, I was fast asleep when I heard a big bang. So I slowly crept towards it, it was my telly, it all went funny. So a few minutes later I went over and touched it, my hand had vanished so I put my other hand in and that vanished too. Suddenly I had disappeared…
After a few minutes, I opened one eye, I could see a tropical place laying infront of me. As I moved an arm I could feel something like it was a cosy blanket, i was feeling so warm that I could stay there forever. My leg twitched like something was grabbing it. As I opened the other eye I could see the earthy, brown branches belonging to a colossal tree.I saw the astonishing trees glow though the dark mist. The place was so strange but beautiful.As soon as I stood up I heard the leaves crunching like something was there! The noise grew louder and louder, suddenly I saw a big, bloody paw as sharp as thorns. My heart was beating like I had just ran across the sea! What should i do?
Slowly, I turned around, my eyes caught a glimpse of two menacing eyes of a dark figure. As quick as a flash, I rapidly turned and sprinted.Frantically I eventually turned around to see the preditor as my head turned one way, I saw myself on the edge of a cliff. Clearly as I had nowhere to run, I carried on sprinting for my precious life. Startled, I turned around, still behind me but now even closer. As I took a step back the preditor tumbled wildly down a never-ending cliff…
All of a sudden i remembered that I had not drank in two whole day, so after a few seconds, I turned my head and then turned it back, I saw a tiny door in the distance on a hallelujah mountain. As i started to walk I landed up infront of a hallelujah mountain, there was a eight legged beast right infront of me so I decided to jump on its leg so I could get on the other side of the hallelujah mountain so the eight legged beast lept on the hallelujah mountain that the tiny door was on. Now I was on the over side, I opened the door…
As I took a step into the the door the place was so different than the place outside. After time went by I tried to open the door to go back outside, but it wouldn’t open so I carried on walking and I saw this tree and i went up to it and I thought it was glowing, when I got closer I found out that it was glowing and I wasn’t imagining it. As I took another step the tree was trying to speak to me, it was saying,
“I am the tree of truth and I can help you to get home so just follow these steps: Go through the path of thorns and then through the blood river.You will come to three boxes but only pick the one you want, now start your journey” Now the tree had disappeared. So I started to walk on and now I had come to the first challenge. It was the paths there where two of them the path of thorns and the path of gold, I had to pick the path of thorns if I wanted to get home. After an hour of trying to get through the thorns I finally did it. The next challenge was coming closer and closer the time was ticking. The next challenge was here I had too go through the rivers. There was three rivers the river of blood, the river of gold and the river of diamonds,so I picked the river of blood, but was at the other side. So finally i came to the last challenge the challenge was to pick the box I wanted it was between all the money of the world, eternal life or to go home. I picked to go home so i went through the go home box and i came to this river I saw myself init and I went to touch I went to this different place and I recognized this place it was HOME!!! I was finally home.
By Murron
February 14th, 2011 on 7:24 am
WOW!! I love your story Murron. I like your sentence: When the frost crept down the road, early in the morning!
February 7th, 2011 on 5:22 pm
Fantastic stories and a great way to share them. Am going to show this website to the rest of the staff in my school.
February 7th, 2011 on 9:59 am
AMAZING! Murron, I can tell you thought long and hard about this story! When I am reading it, I can see a image in my head. You described this really well! Well done. I love the use of VCOP!
Maybe on the second paragraph, like Maryam said, you maybe could of described how you felt! I think it was brilliant!!
February 7th, 2011 on 9:33 am
BRILLIANT! You have really described a lot in your story.I liked the part when it said, ‘ The frost crept down the street early in the morning’. You have used wonderful WOW words, that really go with your story. The description in your story really fit’s in. I think it was AMAZING!!!
By Raja.
February 7th, 2011 on 9:25 am
Well done Murron, I love your use of puncuation, when you used this sentence: “I am the tree of truth and I can help you to get home so just follow these steps: Go through the path of thorns and then through the blood river.You will come to three boxes but only pick the one you want, now start your journey”
It is REALLY good! But I think on your second paragraph, when you said after a few minutes, I opened one eye, I think you could of described it alittle more. Like saying how you felt or if you had a injury.
But over all BRILLIANT!