The Sacred Key- By Mohammed
by pandora on Feb.07, 2011, under Literacy, Stuff
Slowly, as I entered the dilapidated building which had caught fire overnight, the sound was eerie. Rapidly, I scribbled some notes on my notepad. The reason I was in this building was because I (Jack) am a journalist. Suddenly, a cabbalistic figure emerged from the dark shadows. I gazed at him as if I could never like away from him. This man had a funny-looking turban and a cloak. As slow as a tortoise, he began to speak to me, “I will create a time portal and you must jump through it. It will take you to another land. There you will find an object and bring it back. You will know what it is when you see it. You must hurry, you have a limited amount of time. However, if you take too long, the portal will close and the world will come to an end.”I concealed my shock. I just stood there, gawping at the man. Is this true? I thought, Is this real? If so, then I had to do something. The time portal was still there, waiting for me to jump in. Finally I decided where mu loyalty lay. Without hesitation, I leapt in the time portal…
I landed with a thump. Groaning in pain, I stood up. Where was I? I thought. As I looked around, I saw that this land was magical and mythical. It was a land of strange beauty. Misty air covers the sky; not revealing what was behind it. The monumental trees swayed and whistled in the air. Furthermore, the roots of the colossal trees were attached to the mountains. Moreover, the prodigious mountains floated serenely in the air due to the magnetic fields. Cascading to the rocks, the glamorous, crystal clear waterfall gushes from high up. Radiant and colorful flowers lived and grew in the vast rain forest. The luscious green grass was trampled 0n by the humongous animals. However my thoughts were interrupted. I froze. My heart turned ti ice. I could hear a rustling noise nearby. Who, or what was it?
Before long, my answer came. Stood in front of me was the most vicious animal I had ever seen. It was called the Sanitour. As quick as a flash, I bolted. I darted through all of the rain forest until finally, I stumbled and fell. I cried in agony. The Sanitour started to gain on me. I felt petrified. “Stop!” I cried. “Please,” I added, wincing in pain. The Sanitour halted. It stared at me suspiciously. This is my only chance, I thought. Quickly, I recounted the tale of the missing object and how I got here. The Sanitour nodded in which looked like sympathy. Surprisingly, I found that it could talk. ” The object you are looking for I think is the Sacred Key which is heavily guarded by almost everyone,” he explained to me. I had a sinking feeling in my stomach. I would never be able to get pass all the guards. Still, I thought, at least I’ve got some company. And with a smile, I drifted off into a deep sleep.
The next day I got up yawning. It was another beautiful sunny day. Slowly, I began to make my way through the plants and started to fond some food. When I had found some and finished eating it, I went back to where the Sanitour was now sitting near the fire, watching it dance in the air. ” We need to think of a plan,” I said to him whilst munching on some more leafs. ” I’ve got it! I’ve got a plan!” yelled the Sanitour.” Tell me the plan then,” I said to him impatiently. When he had finished explaining to the plan, I thought it was a good idea. In fact, it was the only idea. ” We’ll just have to see what happens tomorrow,” I muttered to myself before going to sleep.
I was up early the next day. I couldn’t go to sleep at all last night. The problem was, I was nervous. All sorts of possibilities ran through my mind. Not watching what I was doing, I put a caterpillar in my mouth. What if the plan didn’t work? Just then, I tasted something with an atrocious flavour which I had never experienced before. ” Ugh!” I exclaimed as I spat out the caterpillar from my mouth. At that moment, the Sanitour was up. ” You’re going home today,” he said cheerfully. ” I hope,” I grumbled back. A few hours later, I was hiding behind a bush, mu eyes glued to the Sacred key. Before long, I heard a scream, ” WAR!” All the animals went away snarling, going to protect their land. The Sanitour can scream loud, I thought, impressesd. I wasted no time. Quickly, I sped off to get the Sacred key. As soon as I got it, I put in my pocket. I needed to get into a safe enough place. ” Phew,” I whispered to myself joyously, I was safe. Or, I thought I was safe. Just then, my whole body froze on the spot. I could hear the sound of heavy footsteps coming in my direction. THUMP! THUMP! It went. Weakly, I merely whispered, ” Who’s there?” It was a foolish thing to do. Slowly, a hungry beast emerged from it’s hiding place. It was the most ferocious beast I had ever seen. Growling, it took a step forward. Just when it was about to eat me, the Sanitour pounced on it from out nowhere. I was saved! ” Go.” He told me. ” I’ll hold him 0ff.” I didn’t need to be told twice. I ran like the wind. When I was in a safe enough place, I held the key out in my hand. I realized that I was fading away. At that moment, I heard a terrible scream of pain. I trembled from head to foot. Who had died?
March 14th, 2011 on 10:31 am
February 12th, 2011 on 6:16 pm
Oooo Mohammed – what a cliff hanger! You are teasing your readers! I really love the way you have written this in the first person. I loved being inside your head with those thoughts while you were frightened. Excellent!