The portal awaits, By Liam.
by pandora on Feb.08, 2011, under Literacy
Ben Macin is not an ordinary type of person, he is more adventurous, and enthusiastic than most people. When Ben was just a young boy, there was only one job he could dream of doin, and after fourteen years, he has achieved his goal, and is now one of the worlds finest. That job was a stunt pilot.
It was a normal day, Ben was getting ready to practice his flying skills, when suddenly, the weather turned for the worst!The dark and gloomy sky was as dark as a panthers coat. There was a vast puff of smoke in the air, as a gust of wind blew by. Ben’s boss (Mr Damond) tried to convience Ben that he should not go out, however Ben barged past him, and got in his plane, and began to start the engines up. As Ben got higher and higher, he began to loose control. At that moment, Ben lost control altogether!
The next thing Ben knew, was that he was in his plane, and on what he thought was a desert. There was no injuries to him, only a few minor cuts and grases. Ben staggered looking for sivilitation. A few hours later, he found himself gazing upon a magnificent palace. Ben thought that the kingmust live there, and he does not want to anger him. So he carried on his journey. Finally, after two days of hicking, he found a tribe of people, Ben crept into their village, searching for food and water. Just then, people of the tribe walked into a hut and found Ben drinking their precious water. He was taken to the high chiefs office. They allowed him to become one of their own.Ben was told that this placeis not a desert, in fact it was an intergalactic world called GRATION!!!
They told ben that Gration is an exotic place, as the radiant sun begins to lower itself you can admire the full radiance of it’s landscape. This land is filled with utter beauty, such as : the meysterious caves, rushing waterfalls, which trickle down the rocky exteria of the cliffs, with light glimmering off it, tropical (deadly) plants, lucious vines, furthermore ragged cliffs. Mystical beasts roam the land, lurking in the distance, searching for it’s prey.These beasts have two faces, there is the domain side, and the vicious side, whom which their prey only see.
Ben was also told about the other tribe, which is the dispicable Trex tribe! Their peoplehad fought their army for many years, however they have never succeeded. They have now given up hope of ever getting home, because the only way to get home is too jump through the old furthermore weary glass portal, which lies in the home of their enemy the Trex tribe! Ben knew where they lived, it was the palace, he was sure of it.
Ben tried and tried to get them to put their army back together, however they would not give in. So Ben decided to make his own army to vanquish the trex tribe. He vowed to the chief, and all his people, and announced “if you follow me, you may die, but when we get out of here you can all live your lives as normal, but if you don’t you will never get free, so I don’t know about you, but I am getting out of here!”
As Ben walked along the cobbled pathway, weilding a jewel indented sword the chief had given him, hundredths of his people in the tribe him and help get home. They all ran as fast as their weiry legs could carry them, all weilding a weapon, screaming for victory!
In the far distance they saw fully armed warriors of the Trex tribe, waiting there, as still as a lonesome dead body on a battle field. As they got there, only three warriors of the Trex tribe stood courageously ready for battle. Suddenly, out of nowhere, thousands of enemy soldiers came reklessly, and surrounded Ben and his army.
At that moment, the Trex tribe fell to the floor all wounded, all with a burning arrow in their back. It was the chief and another army. They all ran into the palace, and headed up to the attic where the portal was located. The portal was there. They all had a choice weither to stay or not!
They all ran rapidly racing to get through the portal first. Apart from Ben he had made his choice, to stay, he exclaimed that his old life was boring (well it wasn’t for me) and that he wants to stay and have an exciting life. He would protect this world from anyone who would attack it. Ben was now a inter galactic enforcer, so if you ever go to Gration, look around you may see Ben.
February 12th, 2011 on 6:08 pm
Crumbs Liam – you have invented a real hero here! I really enjoyed reading of Ben’s adventures.Can I make a suggestion for even more inmprovement? If you read it through, you will be able to see that sometimes you leap from situation to situation without fully explaining it to the reader. Have a look & see if you agree.